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Frozen Angel (Lyric) by Ranger

Hear the shadows falling from deep beneath the well Flick and shine from off of the crystal-domed angel Whose timeless eyes of long-lost years will watch and wait and show But her day to be praised came centuries ago She stands alone like one of stone Buried deep in shallow ground The lilting rain brings no more pain To ears bereft of sound Her wings caress abandoned nests Caring for them 'till they're found And when, unchained, she's loved again Time's threads will have unwound There are those who think a heart-shaped hole Directs you to a ripped-out soul But if the heart should be replaced Which way around would they now face? Although she grieves she still believes In one more power-to-be But wily Fate did therefore state She nevermore would see And then did find that Love is blind Despite His cruel decree Her sole weak trait then calmed His hate And shone on you and me

Ranger 18-Dec-02/1:24 PM
It's true that some of the lines don't quite work here-I thought that myself as I was writing it. Sadly that was at about three o clock in the morning, so I couldn't really clear my mind enough to come up with anything better. Then this morning, when I came to try and improve it I'd just totally lost all the ideas I had, which was an arse!
I considered not putting this on here until I'd improved it, but it occurred to me that I'm not a poet (no shit!) and that maybe the people on this site might help me with it, cause I really think it's ok. I especially feel pleased with the middle four lines of the last verse-I don't know where on earth they came from!
As for your guess, you are almost right. It???s actually a very obscure metaphor for me, in a strange sense (i.e. I???m not female, nor would I ever consider myself an angel). You are kind of right, though. It is drawn from a love I never had-but I would never curse her-we???re still great friends. It's really just the stupid period that all teenagers go through, but I figured that even if how I feel isn't important to the rest of the world, it's still important to me.
My friend Dani here just said that I could make a really good writer or poet if I tried! That was very complementary!
Anyway, thank you again for your time, I've got to go and get the bus or I'll be stuck in college miles from home!




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