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Birth (Haiku) by nentwined

warm evelopement nurturing bath, burning love ends with explosion

BenRice 18-Dec-02/10:15 AM
I agree that the haiku is somewhat eventful. Is there more of a moment you can capture? Perhaps stay with the moment right before and have only the anticipation of explosion?

I like the haiku form though and I agree that it is not so easy.




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