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endless eternity: (Free verse) by Sapphire

waves crash a steady beat pounding shores in rhyme time suckles of mother natures teat all the while man remains blind the shifting sands run through a slick channel lost souls still wander the ages a taste rolls in mouths of unwary - banal yet they never see they are within cages

nentwined 12-Jun-02/2:22 AM
"suckles of" -> "suckles off"
"natures" -> "nature's"
"all the while man remains blind" -- flow seems off here. and on the next line. actually, from there down, it seems a bit off.




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