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HATTIE (Ode) by Nicholas Monson

O, dearest lady, You curvaceous beast! Thou, whom Nature has adorned With spills of flesh, Forgive me, I, who once did mock Your ocean thighs, Your porpoise arms And wind-swelled cheeks Your rubber dingy breasts! Forgive me, For I did not dream I'd on you float Or in you Sink and drown.

Nicholas Monson 7-Dec-02/10:39 AM
It is being published in the Miscellany (along with Party Mugging) following a few changes. What do you make of this new draft (an extra line, a different lay-out and Thou to You)
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> O, dearest lady,you curvaceous beast!
> You whom Nature has adorned with spills of flesh,
> Forgive me, I who once did mock your ocean thighs,
> Your roller-coasting tum, your porpoise arms
> And wind-swelled cheeks, your rubber dinghy breasts.
> Forgive me, for I did not dream
> I'd on you float or in you sink and drown.
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