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HATTIE (Ode) by Nicholas Monson

O, dearest lady, You curvaceous beast! Thou, whom Nature has adorned With spills of flesh, Forgive me, I, who once did mock Your ocean thighs, Your porpoise arms And wind-swelled cheeks Your rubber dingy breasts! Forgive me, For I did not dream I'd on you float Or in you Sink and drown.

Nicholas Monson 7-Dec-02/10:36 AM
Dear Nicholas,

You will get the article in the post, Christmas willing next week. In the meantime, I revised the poem and the Editor of The Miscellany has decide to publish it along with That Girl which is the proper name for Party Mugging (Again). This is the revised Hattie poem. Do you prefer it?

HATTIE

> O, dearest lady,you curvaceous beast!
> You whom Nature has adorned with spills of flesh,
> Forgive me, I who once did mock your ocean thighs,
> Your roller-coasting tum, your porpoise arms
> And wind-swelled cheeks, your rubber dinghy breasts.
> Forgive me, for I did not dream
> I'd on you float or in you sink and drown.
>
Editor's comment: You write naturally in longer-breathed lines - minimum tetrameter; up to an alexandrine.
>
Best wishes,

Nicholas





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