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want it (Ode) by sontei

i want you in the bushes i want you in the grass i want you in the brambles that really cut my arse i want you with your clothes on i want you in the nude i want you wearing leather and talking really rude i want you in a limo i want you on a bus i want you in a taxi if one turns up for us i want you as my lover i want you as my wife i want you in my bedroom for every day of my life

Nicholas Monson 4-Dec-02/5:17 AM
The last line has seven beats. Should be six. Spoils it. What about - To fuck you all my life ? Love may be more delicate. Choice depends on the sensibilities of the recipient. I really like this poem but I want to tinker with other bits too. For instance delete "with your clothes" on (it is too weak) Substitute "with suspenders" or "in bikinis".




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