poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on flight by soccer23.

Quarton3 Dec 2002

A sad little poem but I liked it. It does need editing as there is a bit of redundancy and some words that are unnecessary. One example:

Bright blue sky deleted so it reads:

She dreams of endless sky. This is minor but so much better IMO. Bright and blue distract from what is a lovely and meaningful sentence. Good luck.