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Of Curves and Straight Lines (Free verse) by Quarton

Straight lines drawn, meeting in right angle fetish; harsh symmetry reflected, ninety degree penchant, sharp and abrupt vision to brain. Shortest distance from here to there. Direct route, stripped down, no frills; been there four right angles before. Curves, banked and winding, meandering; easy on the psyche, relative understanding. Light bent gently, attracted--refracted by gravity's sure embrace. Soft, natural curvature, fingers running--tracing, a lover's hand embracing. Road ahead tightening; spinning--careening out of control. The artist, brush in hand, pondering--visualizing, deft strokes from A to B. Direct or wandering, line perhaps spiraling or one dimensional, straight line confining. Nature's scope unbounded, flowing--undulating, Crick and Watson expounded. Double-helix; twists and curves, in profusion cloning; genetic perfection--reflection; God's image everywhere. Straight line mentality, linear thinking--measuring, over-analysing; dead end reality--commonality. Blinders firmly attached; gazing straight ahead. Cubism, Pablo's idealism, three dimensional, fragmented; perception's unique imagining. Conceptual realism with superficial sightings, heads in unison nodding; blank stares and dogs barking, trespassers beware. Earth's curvature astounded, simplistic--realistic; straight lines prone, reality reclining--defining and confounded. Cubism applied conceptually like the moon and stars, tiny orb rising--rounded. Circular reality--duality, projectile spinning, curving-returning; life's round about learning. Vortical winds blowing, earth rotating and solar system revolving; light sustaining sunlight shining--defining. Milky Way turning--burning, black holes gravity defying; galaxies circling in clusters like atoms in microcosm. Electrons in orbit whirling; matter implying--surmising energy's presence--essence. No curves or straight lines to compare-- no substance anywhere.

ecargo 1-Dec-02/12:38 PM
Science and perception, nice. I think the rhymes and the rhythm work, especially if you read it aloud. I don't think I've seen Crick and Watson "namechecked" in poetry before--I don't know that you really need it in that verse, since it's pretty obvious what you're talking about without it. I like!




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