Replying to a comment on:

falling (Free verse) by Aggreddion

days seem brighter sleep seems deeper sights seems sharper heart beats deeper -falling

<~> 27-Nov-02/6:40 AM
i don't think you need 'falling' twice, but i like it at the end. maybe a different title? also, maybe something other than 'deeper' twice? or make it a third, so the repetition is intentional? nice. spare. effective. have a 7 for starters.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001