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Charlie (Haiku) by INTRANSIT

Glowing orb with spots Circular motion, it swings Joy in a fishbowl

<~> 26-Nov-02/7:22 PM
since you have given him a name, i'd like to see anthropomorphism in the poem. i.e., call him 'him,' not it. swing it just a little more, too.




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