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The Epitaph (Free verse) by vulcan

The Waves marry clandestine On the green banks of the overflowing Overwhelming Nature; I try to combine In the midst of the scrupulousness of tuberculosis that stains with color the pale handkerchief of my Existence Happiness with Blood; But O those flushed flowers are in full bud again And I find fishes unwinking once more No!I feel ,I feel the disturbing distance Between this vaulted grave and that Vaulted Sky.

Caducus 26-Nov-02/9:38 AM
Vulcan !
This could be really good and I see you've re edited it. But....its still flawed check line 8, change the opening of line 10,

take your time I f****g love beginning and end but the aforementioned's gotta get sorted.




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