Replying to a comment on:

"Why would I need to get in touch with you?" (Free verse) by Limness

The weight of those words crushes me The mean in between /that you did not think/ sinks /and i bleed quietly/ It's nothing It's nothing You didn't blink

Limness 18-Nov-02/5:12 PM
thanks. my reasoning? i like the two "nothing"s because it's more self-effacing that way--as my "i" is lowercase, and his is uppercase. and i'm keeping "didn't" instead of "did not" because his attitude towards me was so flip, so casual.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001