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Today (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

In this gloomy room I watch the rain It traces the pane I am the pain In this room I've gloomed

god'swife 13-Nov-02/10:31 AM
No not at all. I was simply asking if YOU are the pain ( I doubt it) or if you are IN pain(that's the mood I pick up from these few lines) I love this kind of economy. I think you could come up with something else to reveal at the end instead of repeating the first line. If I thought it was bad I would just come out and tell you.




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