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One Country (Free verse) by poetandknowit

You are standing in Doan's house, built strong to fight the upslope in an alluvial valley west of Fresno, hidden from the desert by fading hills revealing secrets one year at a time. In this place we can meet without discretion, where harvest ended long before these early days of October when darkness does not bend troubling even stars navigating from horizon to horizon, and the wind's new chill still feels thick and fertile blowing past fields barren in bounty. In this dream, I can wrap my arms around you as the woman in a photograph I found on a street some years ago of a place I have never been, although now it is Mendoza or La Rioja, and you are staring away from the camera all the while knowing it is there. In this dream I come as teacher and apprentice to you humming with Gardel's birdsong in the kitchen heat, sweat lights your skin, En unos labios ardiente dejar una promesa hips swaying, arms kneading flat dough for semolas quiero calmar los enojos siempre mintiendo amor and sweet bread bakes in the oven In this place I have bent to my knees, prayed for disappeared mothers and stolen sons, swallowed the dirt of your country, just to feel a part of you.

poetandknowit 12-Nov-02/1:58 PM
I was not bothering you. You merely asked for suggestions regarding the perversion poems and I offered a couple as goofy as the ones you had already posted. You made an initial comment about my mother regarding a poem, simple as that. Everything past that point has been a response to that. Previous comments have been in regards to your asinine comments regarding things you obviously no little about: world affairs. And you spew angry sentiments without logic. Yes, I think most people, whether they know someone or not, can feel for the loss of life that is taken in such tragic proportion in any situation. I am sorry you lack the ability to comprehend this, and that you would rather stoop to name calling and wishing that I had a life, etc. etc., when really that has little to do with any of the argument. In your educational development, are you learning anything, Have you traveled at all? Or do you just get you kicks at the local McDonald's? A place that if you had any sensible knowledge or ethics, you would choose not to frequent.




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