Christof7 Nov 2002

I can see the Odysseus thing - allt he sailing and beacon images. I think i would finish after 'again, safe', although 'throwing my ribs/ at her feet' is good'. Perhaps hold that over for a separate poem entirely? It find this last stanza difficult because i appreciate why you want those emotions there, and it does complicate your homecoming in an interesting way, but I think your expression is just too fevered.