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crime scene (not for the weak!) (Free verse) by t_t_redhot

A call comes in, and I head out. Another patient, another death. Abrasions, lacerations, oh my god what happened here. Blood is everywhere, but I keep on looking. In another room, there is more for me too see. Amputation and bowel evisceration, can anyone be saved. I move fast, I hear a cry, theres more, but this one is alive. Facial avulsion, she is in pain. We take her first, she will be ok. One to the er, two in black bags. All in a days work.

<~> 4-Nov-02/8:06 AM
so, why not try and convey some of that? why not DESCRIBE what you see, instead of just telling us about it? i'm not trying to be belligerent, but this is a good idea for a poem and it is disappointing that you have done nothing to develop it. just saying 'i do this, and i see shocking sights' means nothing, changes nothing, shares nothing. why bother?




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