anonymous19 May 2002

i recognise the feeling
but feel your poetic voice dowsn't match your perecption; the wisdom of the last line of the first verse is almost lost by being awkwardly expressed. "so" is usually a filler word, as here, and so :-) diminishes the poem. Cd be "my heart feels light, like soft wind.." or even "this heart"

Beginning with a noun phrase is a bit odd, no dynamic, juvenile... but the insight is there.