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Pigeons at the end of winter
(
Lyric
) by
mikejedw
Their molt is snowing from the brownstone ledge when, suddenly, they burst against the air and flutter into this week's milder wind. The flock of fat gray birds are thunder clouds; their wings, in chorus, like an echoed storm.
hoopoe
19-May-02/3:29 AM
I agree with Aduren... you are a poet Mike no doubt for a second.
but this isn't up to your best .. the last two lines don't reach anywhere for me.. I love the first three!!! well, not quite .. I think it's the last line, it doesn't really resolve or say anything new. what a wonderful opening line especially though...
a pleasure to read you ..
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