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Dilemma of a Crip (Free verse) by Ninoy_Instigator

What am I to do. Gangbangers, busters, and killers We were a ruthless gang They are a living remnant of my past Back in the day, when I was a thriller. We were the Crips, the toughest gang No need to be discrete Pistols sounded every week I would fight without worry I'd spit in the name of the street Domain was most important The human ego is morbid If you saw a blood member Or a non-crip C-Walkin' He was as good as dead But I have a huge dilemma, Towards Crips, people have anger I have something more important Someone I care about I can't put my baby in danger. I must abandon my old friends They mean nothing but trouble The streets are polluted Enemies seem tougher Gangbangin' is forever a struggle.

Tintagiles 18-Oct-02/1:49 PM
'Towards Crips, people have anger' is tripe. Tripe tripe tripe tripe tripe. Now tripe, when well-cooked with salt, pepper, and a little oregano, can be good enough. In this case, it's raw. It doesn't fit the rest -- which isn't very good either. No feeling of dilemma whatsoever. Blah.




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