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I am Cuba (Lyric) by cacophony

I am Cuba you're the States You're the limelight on my mistakes I'm a sprocket spinning round You're a crank pushing me down You are the moon and I'm the tide You pull the strings while I am blind You're T.D.Jakes. I am your flock I'm a heart murmur you're like a clock

cacophony 17-Oct-02/4:43 AM
Thanks for your comments (Christof also). You are of course right. The last 4 lines were originally 8 which I didn't like so re-did just before I posted. On the spur of the moment I was quite pleased with myself but in the harsh light of day I can see that it doesn't work all that well.




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