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Kindling (Free verse) by <~>

The fire spits and hisses on this autumn eve and there's a hollow roar behind that pulls the spent flame's breath out into the night. Exhausted, the carpenter sits beside me feeding his scraps to the stove and the damp of my back begs me to turn and toast it. The taut of my face too long toward the heat rounds, to find him loose and smiling. The fire does this to us, he says. His leg is not a soft pillow but the tenderness I feel when he strokes my hair is more comfortable than any down and warms me through. Let the cold drizzle. We have built fire inside tonight and piled it for a slow burn.

Rex Karrs 14-Oct-02/8:37 PM
Nice work Zinny! Perhpas your most sensual yet, in the literary sense. BUT... Kindling is the beginings, right? the small pieces that fuel the bonfire? And the beginings of sensuality are all about hints and innuendo. All this to say, don't be so obvious in using the word FIRE three times... What is it that Pops and Hisses? The fireplace? The Oak, the Maple ? The last of the Cherry from some forgotten Orchard? The Sapling pine not yet aged and hard?. Leave "Built Fire" - it works there, because you leave out the article "a" so it defines a very different thing you've created. So maybe he says "The Flame does this to us." I dunno.




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