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Just Being Me (Free verse) by jsab78

You see these eyes and compare to my name, Anglo-Saxon is not my style, I feel a different kind of pain, Not a minority or a slave of racial wars, Darkend scarred skin from chemical burns and broken hearts, I am "olive" and yellow to some, Classified as asian and accepted by none, Stereotypes and categories don't apply, You perception of my looks are what you think is mine, I am NOT, Not yours, not any, No culture classification, I was not created by your one and only nation, I am worldly, No claims to a land and never belonging, I like it like that, I prefer to relate to all those under velour skies and clouds drifting toward the sun, Stop placing me in a class because in this world we are one, Slanty eyes and olive skin, red streaks in my hair from my irish granmother, Small chest from gentics of the orient, hula hips and features from my own mother, Did you call me what? Sorry, I am another, Racist comments won't work on me, This is one world... let us be one... I'm just being me

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-Oct-02/2:33 AM
I use "big words", whatever they might be, because they're the first ones that occur to me. If you like, I'll make sure to replace all words with more than 2 syllables with ones with 2 or fewer syllables when I comment on your poemes! With that in mind, though, could you not use the words "ignorance", "judgemental", "appealing", "simplistic", "audience", "obvious", "constructive", "criticism", "consider", "everyone", "obviously", "intelligent", "corrections", "suggestions", "original", "apologize", "computer", "commentaries", "internet", "compositions" and "marketing"? They hurt my ignintness.

Also, I'd be interested to know where you're getting all this "prefer to use big words to make your work more appealing", "dark and deep", "Marilyn Manson", "black lipstick" stuff from. As far as I can tell you've just invented it on the spot, but if it helps you cope, by all means carry on.




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