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song of the birds (Free verse) by rainbow

i walk in the forest i hear the crisp leaves crunch beneath my feet the sunlight shines upon my face the hawk cries i feel it's pain i smell the the forest i feel calm i watch the clouds pass by above my head i feel so alive i look around i feel so alone all by myself i have nothing left the golden sun hides from me the forest turns black it is no longer my friend the hawk cries once again i feel it's pain i feel my pain

<~> 9-Oct-02/8:36 AM
how is this a song of birds? sounds more like a diary entry of a teenage girl who needs to get out and live a little.




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