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I don't fit in (Free verse) by devina

I'm so deppresed, don't know what to do. I feel so alone, I wish I knew. Where everyone is, what everyone do. I miss my friends, I wish they knew. I don't fit in here, in this new place. In my heart it's an empty space. I made some choices in my life, I made a lot of mistakes. But do I have to pay for them forever? And now I'm sitting here, in this whole new place. I don't fit in, I'm all alone. Will it be like this forever? I wish I knew. I hate this place, it's a whole knew space. I just don't fit in.

Tarquin De La Bog 9-Oct-02/3:30 AM
Woeful. 0. If I had a pound for every outpouring of teenage angst that I've read on this site, I'd be a very rich man. There's nothing particularly wrong with your words apart from being a masterclass in how to write dull cliches, but PLEASE change the subject matter and stop sounding so whiny and pathetic. Look up unoriginal in the dictionary, and this poem would be there. I am offended to my core.




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