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Bottom (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul

Being at the bottom is a lonely place Even when there is people around me I feel as though not a soul is close When I'm touched lonliness still reminds me that its not real and that I'm truly in a dark room by myself I hear voices that echo across the dark gloomy walls but the sound is just coming from the only person that I truly know is there myself

Christof 7-Oct-02/8:47 AM
You need to punctuate and also it should be 'there are people' in line 2. I really do get the impression of your thoughts echoing around though.




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