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Bottom (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul

Being at the bottom is a lonely place Even when there is people around me I feel as though not a soul is close When I'm touched lonliness still reminds me that its not real and that I'm truly in a dark room by myself I hear voices that echo across the dark gloomy walls but the sound is just coming from the only person that I truly know is there myself

vulcan 7-Oct-02/7:39 AM
I think if you start with"There at the bottom is a lonely place"it would seem as if you're speaking from there.(So the force of personality shall work better in that way).good!I like personally-felt poems.(I had something very much like this esp the end of it!i.e.I understand!)6/8




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