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Breathless. (Free verse) by Service

I slide between white folds I see myself through moist reflection. I feel hot breath I hear my heart, my ears ringing. Her face is restfull. Her eyes close, reflection lost. A smile starts. My hand is held, sleep comes swiftly. Not how i thought life would be, But now it starts with my wife to be.

vulcan 4-Oct-02/12:42 AM
Well I liked it!except for the last stanza!(I expected you to say "I lost my life in a peaceful dream"!but still the first line of the last stanza is good enough"but now it brings peace, I prefer to be"how do you like it?sorry just a suggestion!7/9




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