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The Mill (Free verse) by vulcan

Shades and lights and shades and lights A windmill musing on the height A woman's passing with her child Another washing clothes nearby, But what's that creeping in the dark? The Artist's secret smile? In that boat which silently departs In that man's eyes worldly-wise, In that Majesty Macabre Among the things that always Are, One feels softly immortal. -"The Mill" is one of Rembrandt's masterpieces

Christof 30-Sep-02/3:00 AM
'softly immortal' isn't a contrast - what meaningful contrast could be made between softness and immortality? They're not opposing values, but they do make a nice sound and evoke the idea that immortality is gentle and nothing to be afraid of. Which ain't that mysterious an idea. You come from a strange angle monsieur.




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