Replying to a comment on:

beauty of senses (Free verse) by apples_tim

Hear the ocean waves crash upon the shore feel the mist caress your face taste the salt as you adore the sunset disappear without a trace Feel the sand between your toes and watch the light illuminate the faces that manipulate all the truth we know Watch the seagulls soar atop sing their hearts to bliss hold your breath, just stop not a second you want to miss Now all senses are astir your body comes forth with zest (can't seem to find the better ending for this poem) ( any suggestions....)

<~> 27-Sep-02/7:58 PM
i'm wondering why one would write yet another sunset poem, without a very specific something to say? i almost feel like you are asking us to live this moment for you. you lived it--you tell us what irt was like, okay?




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001