Replying to a comment on:

Witch to Wicca (Free verse) by Lenore

You snap your hair back like a child's, Don your costume of whatever's clean, And get to work Ceremonies are redundant When every minute is a hurried whisper To the Goddess who exists only Because someone has to be the object of your prayers Candles and chalk circles turning in about points That lead to a surging center You diffuse your power evenly as your life Spreads at its edges like somebody's Spilled gasoline Fire: never-ending sun Air: circling the dust before the storm Water: sweat-tinged rain pouring down Earth: you fall and caress it As it turns to mud despite your tearless eyes And, like a child knocking on the door Of the house that doesn't like children, You turn confused and wide-eyed To no one For your God is not; And magic only works when you learn that.

vulcan 27-Sep-02/11:33 AM
Excellent Lenore!(and your view is quite right!)-I think it sounds much better if you put "Spilled gasoline after "somebody's"(but did divide it so because of "Fire"?)I liked your "every minute is a hurried whisper" 9/10 (sorry is it not a house in line19,Great anyway!)




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001