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Unveiled (Free verse) by aperfecttool77

I wake every morning living a lie All thoughts and dreams about you by my side My mind is conquered and ravaged by thoughts of something I might never have -And you know this too. I hide the truth behind this veil of tranquility everyone witnesses Only adding to my sorrow -And you know this too. So much I want to say to you, but I lack the words to say it You leave me breathless I???d give it all for one taste of the life I may never live -And you know this too. What about what I want to know? Do you still feel like you once did? Will there ever be a you and me? -And you know this too. I will love you forever and always But never can I tell you this Because I don???t want you to experience this hell that I do. -This, you may never know.

Christof 24-Sep-02/7:27 AM
What an interesting discussion. I din't think it's impossible to write a poetry of internal discussion and bald statement as opposed to simile - GK CHesterton said that metaphor and simile were the antithesis of poetry, and the whole of Wordsworth's 15000 line 'Prelude' is a discussion with the self. However, it is difficult to write something so self-revealing and to make it really speak to others. It does require an absolutely iron grip on language.




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