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Unveiled (Free verse) by aperfecttool77

I wake every morning living a lie All thoughts and dreams about you by my side My mind is conquered and ravaged by thoughts of something I might never have -And you know this too. I hide the truth behind this veil of tranquility everyone witnesses Only adding to my sorrow -And you know this too. So much I want to say to you, but I lack the words to say it You leave me breathless I???d give it all for one taste of the life I may never live -And you know this too. What about what I want to know? Do you still feel like you once did? Will there ever be a you and me? -And you know this too. I will love you forever and always But never can I tell you this Because I don???t want you to experience this hell that I do. -This, you may never know.

OneFingerAnswer 24-Sep-02/12:12 AM
I see a style to it. He repeats a single line then puts a twist on it at the end. Once again, you're mistaking your dislike of something for it's lack. Just because you don't like the style he used doesn't mean it's not there.




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