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Pilgrim (Free verse) by timfowler

I walked last night to a place of flaring darkness, where bone faces, shining, turned to follow my silent steps. I walked last night in a country of the blind: all loveless textures, caught by a crude sculptor of mountains. I walked last night through the turning of a book and gained clear sight by the closeness of the words. I walked last night in a flow of frost, deep blue ice and light-fractured crystal, yet felt no fear of the cold. I walked last night with the will of others. and returned to this morning, waking immobile and grey.

Lenore 23-Sep-02/6:33 AM
I like it however I'm not crazy about the use of 'flaring'. I stumbled on that one line. over all I give it a 7/10




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