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Lysander cried (Free verse) by bornagainpoet

When I was a boy I studied hard tried to please my parents. I grew up became a college student I studied hard to please my parents. I grew up some more became a worker worked hard to please my parents. Became a boss, did well,to please my parents. I grew up some more, my parents died, Lysander cried.

INTRANSIT 22-Sep-02/6:57 PM
I like simplicity, could be modified to rhyme without losing it's intent. Good stuff!




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