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Tugboats (Free verse) by poetandknowit

The fish factory's stack spits thick steam, smothering air with smoke and the stink of baking snapper and salt water herring. Packing machines stifle waves spilling, painting sand smooth. Gulls splash for dogfish or starve or kill each other hovering above, waiting for disposal. I pull a half pint from my lunch bag. A tugboat guides a crab ship to port, preparing for a new shift. Men gather around the factory door, soundless - ragged flannels concealing pale bodies burning from boiler heat, stitched hands and scabbed fingers fresh from paring tables. Skin soaked with the stench of rot that never goes away. I sip whiskey as the morning horn screams. Night men file out defeated, bodies reflecting gold in the sun. My pop walks among them in slow rhythm with the machine beat, his face stone from sneaking booze at break time, eyes tired. When he reaches me he says nothing, just takes me in his arms - wet from his skin cleanses me, sweet liquor on his breath. Then he moves toward home as I follow the single line straight past the time clock, into the ocean.

Dark Angle 22-Sep-02/12:59 AM
god, all this has gone on to far, (not to plagerize Rodney King) but cant we all just get along, this is just a web site for people to submit poems and get some feedback, is it not? why the cruelty? why does everyone feel the need to so 'witfully' make fun of the author, they try their best, you dont need to fuck with their ego, just because some of you may be more experienced at writting doesnt mean you are any better, we all had to start somewhere. cant you all just relax. and if not, go to some aol chatroom where these type of verbal personal attacks are accepted with open arms...




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