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Tugboats (Free verse) by poetandknowit

The fish factory's stack spits thick steam, smothering air with smoke and the stink of baking snapper and salt water herring. Packing machines stifle waves spilling, painting sand smooth. Gulls splash for dogfish or starve or kill each other hovering above, waiting for disposal. I pull a half pint from my lunch bag. A tugboat guides a crab ship to port, preparing for a new shift. Men gather around the factory door, soundless - ragged flannels concealing pale bodies burning from boiler heat, stitched hands and scabbed fingers fresh from paring tables. Skin soaked with the stench of rot that never goes away. I sip whiskey as the morning horn screams. Night men file out defeated, bodies reflecting gold in the sun. My pop walks among them in slow rhythm with the machine beat, his face stone from sneaking booze at break time, eyes tired. When he reaches me he says nothing, just takes me in his arms - wet from his skin cleanses me, sweet liquor on his breath. Then he moves toward home as I follow the single line straight past the time clock, into the ocean.

loki 21-Sep-02/5:01 PM
poetandknowit, you actually posted that peice of crap? and put your name to it? man your brave, personally i feel your tallent would be better spent writing blurbs for used tampons. Maybe you should look at being a fish molester, you seem to be very interested in them.
I gather you have a drinking problem? AA does wonders, and you never know it may also cure your bad poetry, one can only hope. The continual use of the word TUG, are you a closet wanker? pervert busters can help with that problem as well. Please spare us any more inane ramblings, it falls under the cruel and unusual punnishment chapter..




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