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Tugboats (Free verse) by poetandknowit

The fish factory's stack spits thick steam, smothering air with smoke and the stink of baking snapper and salt water herring. Packing machines stifle waves spilling, painting sand smooth. Gulls splash for dogfish or starve or kill each other hovering above, waiting for disposal. I pull a half pint from my lunch bag. A tugboat guides a crab ship to port, preparing for a new shift. Men gather around the factory door, soundless - ragged flannels concealing pale bodies burning from boiler heat, stitched hands and scabbed fingers fresh from paring tables. Skin soaked with the stench of rot that never goes away. I sip whiskey as the morning horn screams. Night men file out defeated, bodies reflecting gold in the sun. My pop walks among them in slow rhythm with the machine beat, his face stone from sneaking booze at break time, eyes tired. When he reaches me he says nothing, just takes me in his arms - wet from his skin cleanses me, sweet liquor on his breath. Then he moves toward home as I follow the single line straight past the time clock, into the ocean.

newbe5 20-Sep-02/9:55 AM
Get your head out of your arse and get over yourself. You are quite obvoisly someone who is not even noticed by others and so find the need to promote yourself in your own mind. Picking on spelling mistakes, degrading the work of others. Bigdog may mean no harm. I, however, do. Places like this are sullied because of people like you. Someone comes on, drops a joke, and look at your sad, pathetic responses. I don't think there is a person alive that does not know the poem, much less someone who might think that bigdog actually wrote this himself. So, why are you taking this so seriously? Is it because of your strong sense of patriotism? To allow the world to know that such a disasterous crime as been committed? Or is it just because you are a sad fuck? I pick the latter.




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