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Glassblowers (Free verse) by Christof

I am just a tourist. I gawp as men behind a grille, Paid to spend their lungs in glass, Blow globes and bowls and jugs And swans, each one the cask Of someone's breathing. In the shop I cradle in my hands a life. All breakages must be paid for And I can't afford the price.

kawakurdi 19-Sep-02/11:22 AM
I agree with Zin. The first line is out of order within the structure of the poem and the title is enough to create the sense of the scene.




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