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Mr. America (Hunting Season) (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

Hunting season, the animals linger and I sit beneath the pine tree receiving judgement while I whistle a tune morbid and mocking. Dead rabbits strewn across my lap daydreaming, head full 'a wonder about when I can cook them and discontinue ignoring the music of the hammer. My pike decorated, with the head of my lawyer, the bastard said I was insane. I never liked the spineless turd anyway; a slight road bump, and now I have a fool for a client, but alas, folks always thought me so. That hammer pounds hard now.. seems the judge demands that I pay attention, causing me to throw my blade into his skull, shutting him up forever. Thank heavens, he was a boring little shit lecturing me like that.

Jill Stockinger 2-Jan-21/6:49 PM
In the second stanza, when you use the word daydreaming, grammatically it appears you are saying the dead rabbits are daydreaming...
No comma between decorated and with the head...




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