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A soldiers life (Free verse) by closeup

Here I lie, Cold in the dead of night, A corpse for company; Ted I dream of dawn to break, And the flooding light to take away the agony of my dismembered face. The sound of gunfire rips through the air like fireworks in the night sky; joy. A loud thud sounds close by, And a river of blood flows into the hole in the ground that I must now call home. "Serve your country!!", "Sign up fast", What a farce, What a joke! A life you call this? A soldiers life? A soldiers death.

Jill Stockinger 1-Jan-21/12:23 PM
small grammatical fix: soldier's life (use an apostrophe)
soldier's death
I'd use a comma between company and Ted, not a semicolon, which is used to separate 2 complete sentences. I assume Ted is the corpse. The poem does capture strong emotion, and certainly makes a strong point




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