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First Love (Free verse) by Mr Pig

You made me insular. Touched me deftly like a sculptress, leaving me as your masterpiece, To stare at the raging kiln. We had a beginning, You had an end, But I've been left unfinished, Austere stillness, amok in memories. I crack and crumble, In to terracotta vapors, lingering a glorious moment, then dissipating, like our love.

Jill Stockinger 27-Dec-20/3:26 PM
I do not see how "insular" fits.
Liked the idea of the person being created by the lover the way a sculptor (or in this case sculptress) creates a ceramic piece. And carrying it through, where like a piece of terracotta, it crumbles into nothing.




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