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(untitled) (Free verse) by A. Nomaly

I was asking about the rain and the fortitude simply because you left it open so abruptly and I forgot everything just then. I needed a reminder. This time was different, you promised and I agreed, it was. Retelling would make it even more so I hoped, but this is what happened. Each word lashed on to what happened before, before, before, skipping stones plunging, military uniforms, sleeves rolled up, medals polished.

nypoet22 12-Feb-11/11:19 PM
the tone and voice are polished. i like this even better than the other one. i may be mistaken but i think you meant either latched or leashed rather than lashed. otherwise top notch.




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