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driftwood (Free verse) by ThePariahDog

stiff as a board lying in the wake of another dream an imprint of your body fading from my bed's white shore "when will you be back?" the soft breeze gone unanswered lost to the loneliness of the wind "i want you to come.." yet a sudden realization sucked breath from yearning's end although death was on your lips last night i will not forget what we had

Dovina 11-Oct-10/12:33 AM
I remember the ancient times when, if memory presents truth, you were young and wrote young. Now this is good, shrouded just enough. Poemranker is abandoned now, all hands jumped ship. It must leave an able seaman wondering why he signed on.




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