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Life (Lyric) by Son Of A Bitch

Life is a lie. A sad goodbye. A broken wave. A frozen sun, A battle brave, I never won. Here is the end, Hello my friend, Take me back to nothing, Away from so much hurting. Death is a dream, With one beautiful scene, And the star of the show is me, I can go far, be what in life I'll never be.

jh99 28-Feb-10/7:08 AM
Forced rhymes and clichéd whines. A-A-B-C-B-C...A-A-B-B...A/A-B-C-B the rhyme scheme. A/A means implied/slant rhyme, not working here.




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