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Dad (Other) by Sheeva

Dreaming of you takes its toll So much it burns my soul You weren't there much Didn't keep in touch Your behind bars now All I could say is wow! You let me down Oh man what now... I'd rather drown One last chance to make it right You gonna take it or put up a fight Its time for you to be my dad Ran away before... am I really that bad?

jh99 27-Feb-10/1:44 PM
Too many " forced rhymes ". Try alternating the rhyme scheme or dropping it altogether and use different descriptions for the emotions, make it fresh and original that way.




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