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disaster in the flesh (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

She sees the warmth drip from him low and ascending, arms pressed in how she never stays at the last juncture never a kiss goodnight Her glances search past the moment like lost moths time now a blunder in all it's glorious delusion you find her in the wake of this

http://mulberryfairy 5-May-09/6:46 PM
Perfect except for the "never, never" repetition, I don't think it needed the clarification about the last juncture/ kiss goodnight thing.




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