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night owl (4) (Senryu) by elementalidad

lay man prays but quietly hates the next day

elementalidad 29-Sep-08/6:38 AM
i suppose i could nip the but, however I think I'd have to either change the tense of "quietly hates" accordingly or insert a forced pause (-) after prays to make sense in english, no? what do you think?

lay man prays-
quietly hates
the next day

lay man prays
quietly hating
the next day




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