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The Things We Wear (Free verse) by jessicazee

I wore your V-neck sweater underneath my red rain dress. I wore your knee-length socks, the worm elastic snapped back. I wore a hat I think was yours, a folded newspaper captain's crew. I wore a combed-out moustache, saluting all night, I curtsied. What I wore you took off, threads, stitches, the tag we ripped out. I held a match to your face. What things we wear, how hot it is.

Dovina 11-Mar-08/3:32 PM
"red rain dress" is a wonderment, maybe like me, you just walk a lot and get wet. "worm elastic" is cute. That hat wont help against rain. S4 is strange, and strangely punctuated. S5 pulls it together, except the tag is again, strange.




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