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Return from Dubious Mission (Free verse) by Dovina

Wipers clack, midnight past down to forty now Rain collides in gobs Remnants ripped from trees and hopes dash before sad eyes Easier the scream and sway hydroplaning’s threat than silent words stabbing in my ears

Paul S 18-Dec-07/5:37 AM
I like what you've done here Dovina. The only thing that seems off is the word "gobs." Everything else works fine.




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