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INTELLIGENCIA (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

Intelligence is the new ethnic cleansing the downer of four week old horses It is the Sumo, and the Mafioso and the clear cutter of forests. It is the bully making her rounds a critic at the opening and an unrestrained fire burning through cities to be it's own it's only desire. It is the microscope micrometer barometric pressure indicator pyrometer sandblast against the fender and the D.N.A. bender. It's the largest of silverback apes it's canines lodged in the back of the brain and a nuclear frost bearing down on the vineyard grapes.

Skamper 16-Nov-07/1:41 AM
there's always a line that needs something - I see what you mean about line 8, it's a little clumsy. Yet, the line works so well with a pause after own.




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